What is wrong with this sentence?

Question

I wrote an essay, and while I admit I'm not a master of grammar, I don't think there was anything wrong with one sentence I wrote, yet the teacher still corrected it.

My original sentence: "Biases and prejudices still prevalent in our society make legal equality in application impossible"

Her edited version: "Biases and prejudices still prevail in our society, and make legal equality in application impossible."

Can someone please explain to me why my sentence was wrong??

Answer 1

There's nothing grammatically wrong with your sentence, but the teacher just thought that her way sounded better in terms of flow. It is a matter of opinion. The other two answers are just plain wrong - they don't understand the entire meaning of the sentence.

Answer 2

If you wanted to use the word prevalent, you would have to put the word "are" between still and prevalent or else the sentence wouldn't be grammatically correct.

Correct options for that portion of the sentence: Biases and prejudices still prevail; Biases and prejudices are still apparent; Biases and prejudices are still prevalent



The word "and" needs to go after the word society because you are joining two sentences together and need a conjunction there.

Correct options for that portion of the sentence: in our society, and make; in our society. They make...; in our society, so they make...;

Answer 3

look up the meanings of prevail and prevalent ,but always remember you write as you speak---so when you take a breath put in a comma.

Answer 4

All species of birds can lay eggs, in any different case how ought to the reproduce? no longer all birds can fly - ostriches won't be able to. whether, opposite to effortless theory chickens can. All birds do have feathers. call me one species that doesn't!