HELP??!!!!??!?!
2008-10-21 23:38:10 UTC
“What are you doing on my Myspace!” –a typical young teenager might say to her mother who is determining to figure out what her daughter does on her free time. Over the years, especially this new era of generation, our communication skills has drastically improved from communicating in person, to talking on the phone to emailing and finally to Myspace and Facebook; nevertheless, the epidemic of these social networks has diluted the minds of American people causing many conversable issue that we face today. In fact, Myspace and Facebook have manifested the internet as one of the best website to share music, pictures, profiles, and personal information’s on the net. Over the years, there are multiple reasons why we should allow or should not allow these websites to be introduced to teenagers. Two of the unique article that came upon me was by Angela Adair Fowler and Michael Bugeja in “The Facebook Addition Spreads” and in “Facing the Facebook” respectively. Although both authors have different point of views, some similarities were, in fact, Myspace and Facebook are a fascinated topic that changed and evolved the lifestyles of many American peoples and the whole world. To this extent, I truly believe what Fowler and Bugeja have to offer.
my outline is like:
introductio to my space( which is above)
2 paragraph summaries fowler
3 essay is my example why fowler is correct
4th is bugeja summary
5th is my example why bugeja is correct
6th is my conclusion
Question: should i keep the outline like that or is there a better way??
also can u give me a grade on my introduction? thanks
Note: u can remove stuff or rewrite it if u like =)