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I am an english student. my first language is spanish. for that i need some help please. I wrote this text and it is not perfect, if you can tell me the mistakes, that will be fantastic!!

Manners and etiquette
There are different cultures around the world. All of them have customs and rules to success and good relation with others. One of these countries is Peru. Peru is located in South America. This country has different local attractions, beautiful landscapes and an interesting history. Throughout time, this country hasn’t lost their magnificent and their natural beauty. If you are going to visit it, you should know some about this place. It’s better use a title when you don’t know the person. For example if you met a girl called Louisa, you should call her Mrs. Luisa or Ms. Louisa. But if the person is your friend you use their name or nickname.
Let’s talk about table manners. In the table you can’t put your elbows or your legs. Don’t use your hands to eat, it’s not properly. It’s better use a spoon, a fork and a knife. In holy week, the people eat only fish. In Christmas, the people usually eat turkey. What about the clothes? Well, the clothes change depending the season. During the summer, the people use t-shirts, shorts, sandals, among others. During the winter they use jackets, gloves, sweaters, etc. Do you see? Peru always has been a beautiful place. But be careful!! If you visit it you should follow the local customs.

Answer 1

Throughout time, this country has not lost it's magnificent natural beauty.

...you should know someTHING about it. (or, know something about this place's customs).

It is better TO use a title when you don't know the person you are speaking to.

For example(COMMA), if you met a girl....Ms. Louisa. If(you don't need to start this sentence with "But") the person is your friend....

AT the table....Don't use your hands to eat, it's not PROPER.

DURING Holy Week

ON Christmas

...the people WEAR t-shirts, shorts, sandals, and other light clothing.

Peru HAS ALWAYS been a beautiful place

If you visit(COMMA), you should follow local customs.



These are small errors, I think you are doing well.

Answer 2

There are many different countries around the world. All of them have customs and rules for success and good relations with others.



One of these countries is Peru, located in South America. This country has different local attractions, beautiful landscapes and an interesting history. Throughout time, this country hasn’t lost it's magnificence or it's natural beauty.



If you are going to visit Peru, you should know some things about the culture. It’s better use a title when you don’t know the person. For example if you met a girl called Louisa, you should call her Mrs. Luisa or Ms. Louisa, however, if the person is a friend you are allowed to use their name or nickname.



Let’s talk about table manners. You must not put your elbows or legs on the table. Use a knife, fork and spoon to eat, it is considered improper to use only your hands. During holy week, the people eat only fish while at Christmas, the people usually eat turkey.



What about clothes? Well, the clothes change depending the season. During the summer, the people usually wear t-shirts, shorts, sandals, among others. During the winter it is usually jackets, gloves, sweaters, etc.



Do you see? Peru always has been a beautiful place. But be careful!! If you visit it you should follow the local customs.







I have changed some of the phrasing of the sentences as the English was not quite correct. Also, when you talk about different subjects (table manners, clothes etc.) you should have a new paragraph for each. Other than that, your English is FAR superior to my Spanish, a very good effort.

Answer 3

Manners and etiquette

There are different cultures around the world. Each culture has unique customs and rules. Following these customs can lead to successful relations with others. Peru is an example of a country with specific customs. It is located in South America. Peru has different local attractions, beautiful landscapes, and an interesting history. Throughout time, Peru has retained it's magnificent and natural beauty. If you are going to visit, there are some things you should know about this place. It’s better use a title if you don’t know a person. For example if you meet a girl called Louisa, you should call her Mrs. Luisa or Ms. Louisa. But if the person is your friend you can use their name or nickname.

Table manners are also of importance in social etiquette. You should not rest your elbows or your legs on the dinner table. In addition eating with your hands is not proper etiquette. It’s better use a spoon, a fork, and a knife. During holy week, the people eat only fish. During Christmas, the people usually eat turkey. What about the clothes? Well, the clothes change depending the season. During the summer, the people use t-shirts, shorts, sandals, among others. During the winter they use jackets, gloves, sweaters, etc. Peru always has been a beautiful place. But be careful!! If you visit you should follow the local customs.

Answer 4

the beginning is good, but when you get here

"In the table you can’t put your elbows or your legs." you should replace it with At the table you should keep your elbows and legs off of the the table.

Then "dont use your hands to eat, its not properly" sounds kind of funny..

put " In their culture its not proper to use your hands while eating. Instead they use a spoon, fork, and knife.

in holy week, the people eat only fish change to "During the holy week, in Peru they only eat fish"

then "On Christmas, they usually eat turkey"



then it sounds good otherwise:)

Answer 5

In the first paragraph:

"Throughout time, this country hasn’t (yet) lost (it's) magnificent(,) natural beauty." That's all I could catch.