can you check my thesis statment?

Question

can you check my thesis statement. it am writing a compare and contrast about two stories on how they use literary element to develop the them. Thesis:The two authors Anton check hove and Nathaniel Hawthorne develop similar literary element to represent how the stories made a theme that pertains a devastating life. The shock of being a normal person to a psychotic overwhelming feeling or loosing faith is a menacing thing in the world.

the stories were "sleepy" by Anton Chekhov and young Goodman brown by Nathaniel Hawthorne
can you check if it has any errors or if it doesn't sound good thank you.

Answer 1

Content, grammar, spelling and punctuation are all rubbish, otherwise it's wonderful.

Answer 2

"The two authors Anton check hove and Nathaniel Hawthorne develop similar literary element to represent how the stories made a theme that pertains a devastating life. The shock of being a normal person to a psychotic overwhelming feeling or loosing faith is a menacing thing in the world."



The following words are misspelled:



check hove --> Chekov

loosing --> losing



'develop similar literary element': 'element' should be plural.



In addition: the statement does not make sense.



"the stories made a theme that pertains a devastating life" -- this is so far from coherent grammar as to be incomprehensible. The stories can't 'make' a theme. The word 'pertains' doesn't mean anything that makes sense in this context.



"The shock of being a normal person to a psychotic overwhelming feeling or lo[o]sing faith" -- I can't even begin to guess what you're trying to say here. Please try again.



"is a menacing thing in the world" -- At least I can understand your meaning. But you're not really saying much.



What are you trying to say? Underneath the elaborations of your thesis, you *must* have a clear, simple statement: that's what your essay will expand on. "Shock is a menacing thing" isn't much of a statement.

Answer 3

It sounds good but instead of saying (develop similar literary element to represent how the stories made a theme that pertains a devastating life) just use the last sentence (the shock of being a normal person to a psychotic overwhelming feeling or loosing faith is a menacing thing in the world.) Also take out (the two authors Anton check hove and Nathaniel Howthrone) if the teacher knows what you are talking about.

If your writing a paper use the (develop similar literary...........) in the introductory instead of the thesis. The thesis is just supposed to be you taking your side on one topic not explaining anything.