English Journal #1: Please fix it gramaticly so I learn from mistakes.?

Question

Upon reading “All Quiet on the Western Front” by Erich Remarque the setting is set during World War 1. More specifically the story takes place in the focus of Germany one of the axis countries in World War 1. The Great War as it may be known included France, Russia, Britain, Belgium USA British colonies like Canada that represented the “Allies” and the “Axis” represented the truce between Germany, Austria-Hungary and Ottoman Empire. The story takes place at the Western Front, one of the two fronts that Germany had most trouble with. The Western Front is located between Germany and what is now reclaimed to be French territory now. Ignoring the fact that I fancy history and specifically in Grade 11 Handsworth year our whole Social Studies unit is specifically about the broad subject of World War 1 thus I do care about the story and the plot. Of course I care about the War because I have a thing for history and I truly believe history is the gate to our modernized society today, history is what enabled us humans evolve from past mistakes. If we don’t learn from our mistakes how are we suppose to progress? Thanks to the history for example we have the UN “United Nations” watcing over the countries to not stir another fight. Without history being recorded our world might have been in state of despair and shock again with the constant fighting and rapid wars we might have faced and was a thing of life. Though All Quiet on the Western Front is in fact a story and not a memoir or biography it is inevitable not to know the outcome of World War 1 because we specifically know that the Great War starts in 1914-1918. Also we learn that the countries participated in World War 1 faced heavy human losses. Also noting Germany had one of the highest tolls of death and the rest of the axis countries lost the war and they faced heavy sanctions not to forget the outstanding debts they had to pay. In a way it was a sad loss for Germany once seeking for more territory ending up much smaller with no financial stability and much fewer men to fuel the economy.

Answer 1

(indent) “All Quiet on the Western Front” by Erich Remarque, set during World War 1.



(indent) The story takes place in the focus of Germany, one of the axes countries in World War 1.

(indent) The Great War, as it may be known, included France, Russia, Britain, Belgium, USA, and British colonies, such as Canada, that represented the “Allies”.

(indent) The “Axes” represented the truce between Germany, Austria, Hungary, and Ottoman Empire.

(indent) The story takes place at the Western Front, one of the two fronts that Germany had trouble with.

(indent) The Western Front is located between Germany and what is now reclaimed as the French territory.

(indent) Ignoring the fact that I fancy history, specifically in Grade 11 Handsworth year, our whole Social Studies unit is about the broad subject of World War 1, thus I care about the story and the plot.

(indent) Of course I care about the War because I enjoy studying history, and I truly believe history is the gate to our modernized society; history is what enabled us to evolve from our past mistakes. If we don’t learn from our mistakes, how are we supposed to progress?

(indent) Thanks to the history, we have the United Nations, commonly known as UN, watching over the countries so we can avoid wars.

(indent) Without history being recorded, our world might have been in state of despair and shock about the constant fighting and wars that we might face.

(indent) Though All Quiet on the Western Front is, in fact, a story and not a memoir or biography, it is inevitable not to know the outcome of World War 1 because we know that the Great War started in 1914 to 1918. Also we learn that the countries that were part of the World War 1 faced a lot of death.

(indent) Also noting, Germany had one of the highest number of death, and the rest of the axis countries lost the war and they faced heavy sanctions, not to forget the outstanding debts they had to pay.



(indent) In a way it was a sad loss for Germany: once seeking for more territory and ending up with much smalleror no financial stability and much fewer men to fuel the economy.



hope i helped :)



by the way, don't forget to indent the lines :) (they're marked with "indent" in parentheses)

Answer 2

First off, "axis" is a WWII, not a Great War term. The usual name for Great War opponents was "central powers," meaning the German and Austro-Hungarian empires.



You need to learn to use paragraphing, as such huge blocks of prose as you use discourage reading. Thus, several provocative questions you ask get lost in the unreadable whole. Also, paragraphing will help you organise your own thoughts, which in the current block text seem somewhat random.



You obviously possess intelligence, so I suggest you try dividing your piece into parcels of no more than five lines. This will not only help your reader; it will help you to see where your patterns of thought follow or diverge.

Answer 3

Preventing tomorrow's by learning from the ones made yesterday and moving on.