What do you think of my D.A.R.E essay?

Question

D.A.R.E stands for Drug Abuse Resistance Education. This program has thought me so much and so has Officer Walsh. D.A.R.E has gave me the knowledge not to do drugs and not to smoke. Also the program gave me the skills to say NO to peep pressure and to make choices based on my opinion and not other peoples.

I learned bunches of things from D.A.R.E. Did you know that marijuana smoke contains 50-70% more of some cancer causing chemicals then tobacco smoke?! That’s something I didn’t know.

I also learned a lot of younger kids think older kids like Jr.High and High schooners smoke, but they don’t. Only 7% of 8th graders have smoked within the last thirty day. I can’t believe it! Only 7% compared to my 40%. WOW!

D.A.R.E has a tremendous impact on me. I am greatly happy that Wiley has offered this program to us 6th graders. I know I will always try to make the best choices and think before I will act.


D.A.R.E is vary important because it gives kids that skill and knowledge about drugs and smoking. Kids will then know not to do drugs or smoke and how it will affect them. They also should know the it is illegal for kids not to drink achole if they are under 21.


After, this whole D.A.R.E program I am happy that Officer Walsh has helped me by giving me this knowledge, about how not to do drugs and how I can stay a happy healthy person.

I pledge to this day I will use this knowledge and skills from D.A.R.E. to keep myself drug and achole FREE.

Answer 1

um it is good, but i found a few mistakes



second line-thought should be taught



line 4- peep should be peer



line 10-schooners should be schoolers



line 11- day should be days



line 12- should be has made



line 12- greatly should be very



line 15- vary should be very



line 17- take out not



line 18- achohol



line 19- take out the comma



line 20- take out comma



line 23- alchohol



you do not have to take these suggestions, but i think that they will help improve your paragraph. other than these few mistakes i really enjoyed reading it.

Answer 2

taught, not thought



given, not gave me



peer not peep



a lot, not bunches



Give more examples, like, real life stuff where you might be asked something and what you'd say or do. Maybe Walsh gave you some example, state how you'll use those examples. etc. I mean, without actually using the peoples names. Say with examples why kids (meaning you) will know not to use drugs or smoke and drink and how it will affect you.



Otherwise, its really good.

Answer 3

I think that essay is amazing. I remeber when I went through dare in 5th grade. Go ahead and turn it in!

Answer 4

1-10? 10 as the best? 10!!!! definatly....

Answer 5

well written