Question:
I some times have problems writing essays. can you go over and see if i made any mistakes. easy 10 points?
1970-01-01 00:00:00 UTC
I some times have problems writing essays. can you go over and see if i made any mistakes. easy 10 points?
Nine answers:
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2016-05-27 15:36:37 UTC
You don't seem like a workaholic to me. You seem more like someone who knows what they want in life, and knows how to achieve it. There's nothing wrong with that. As for your classmates, just tell them you know what you want to be in life. Not many people your age can say that. Just keep your head held high and be confident. You go girl :3
2008-10-19 19:00:41 UTC
I have made the corrections below. so just read through it to see the changes...



You might also want to cite your sources!



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Have you ever been interested in looking online for your soul mate? Well you're not alone, more then 40 million Americans look at online dating websites every month. First of all, the essay “Love, Internet Style” describes how different online dating websites lean towards different types of people. “J Date” is a popular Jewish dating website. Second, Match.com boasts they are the leading website, providing you with more then 15 million singles. Lastly, “Latino People Meet” is a website that give Hispanic locals the chance to meet other Hispanics. As such, I will discuss the different dating websites one of which may be perfect for you.



In present times, dating websites have become a new wave to meeting classy people you might be interested in dating. “ J Date” is typically for the Jewish culture. However, being Jewish is not necessary on “J date”, although it is highly recommended. “J Date” states that “Every 23 minutes someone tells us they met their soul mate”. I personally agree to use a cultural based dating website because many people want to date someone beonging to the same religion.



All the same, occasionally people will be more interested in meeting a sincere person willing to have a stable relationship. If this is the case, Match.com is the way to go. They have many ways to communicate such as, sending a wink, emailing, or sending a instant message. Match.com states they have the most singles on their website than any other dating website. They report to having 15 million members online looking for a healthy relationship. Although, dating websites can be frustrating because you might not get matched up with the right person, Match.com ensures your selections by letting you take a quick quiz to match you up correctly. Therefore, I believe Match.com is the best and easiest way to meet other people online.
bananabreath247
2008-10-19 18:51:21 UTC
1. If this is supposed to be formal, eliminate use of the first & second persons.

2. Sentence two has a vague "it" and is disjointed.

3. Sentence about Math.com needs "s" at end of "boast."

4. Same sentence, you use the wrong term: "then" instead of "than."

5. "Lastly" should be changed to "last" so it matches the preceding terms in the list.

6. Last sentence of first paragraph MUST GO. Never tell the reader to keep reading, if your paper is interesting they can make up their own minds.

7. Change first sentence 2nd paragraph to "dating websites are" and swap "wave" for "way."

8. Third sentence, either capitalize "Date" in "J Date" or don't, be consistent. Same sentence, that looks like a comma. It needs to go, or you need to use a lowercase letter for the next word. Your pick. I say split up that sentence.

9. Next sentence, lowercase on the beginning of the quote, and cite the source if that is what your teacher requires. Also, period goes inside the last quotation mark.

10. Next sentence needs complete overhaul. I think you mean to say you approve of the notion of religion-specific sites? If yes, then say so.

11. Next sentence (beginning of 3rd paragraph) change "wants" to "want."

12. Two sentences later, move the comma from where it is (after "such as") to before "such as."

13. Next: Match.com states THAT they have...

14. Next sentence, drop "to."



Basic general stuff: What was the assignment? Make sure you've met the criteria for the project. Also, outline main points and fix up your topics a bit, because your paragraphs are kind of randomly filled with information, rather than guiding the reader throughout specific items to a conclusion. And how much opinion is this thing supposed to contain? Make sure you keep that in check also.

Good luck!
ITS MEEE
2008-10-19 18:47:04 UTC
here i fixed it! only a few mistakes =]





Have you ever been interested in looking online for your soul mate? Well you're not alone. More then 40 million Americans look at online dating websites every month. In the essay “Love, Internet Style”, it describes how different online dating websites lean towards different types of people. First of all, “J Date” is a popular Jewish dating website. Second, Match.com boasts that they are the leading website that provides you with more then 15 million singles. Lastly, “Latino People Meet” is a website that gives Hispanic locals the chance to meet other Hispanics. Keep reading as this paper goes in depth on the different dating websites and which one may be perfect for you.



In present times, dating websites are the new wave to meeting new, classy people you might be interested in dating. “ J Date” is typically for the Jewish culture. Being Jewish is not necessary on “J date” , although it is highly recommended. “J Date” states that, “Every 23 minutes someone tells us they met their soul mate.”. I personally agree with using a cultural based dating website for the fact that many people want to be dating in the same religion.



Many times people will not care about the religion and just want to meet a sincere person that is willing to have a stable relationship. If this is the case, Match.com is the way to go. They have many ways to communicate such as sending a wink, emailing, or sending an instant message. Match.com states they have the most singles on their website than any other dating website. They calculate that 15 million members online look for a healthy relationship. Dating websites can be frustrating due to the fact that you might not get matched up with the right person. Match.com ensures your selections by letting you take a quick quiz to match you up correctly. I believe Match.com is the best and easiest way to meet other people online.
Jean O
2008-10-19 18:46:43 UTC
Your points are very clear, however in most essays you don't address the reader (it's an essay, not an advertisement) so it would be written as third person. But if this is how to chose to write it and your teacher is okay with it you should be all right.



This sentence

In the essay “Love, Internet Style” it describes how different online dating websites lean towards different types of people.



You could just say "The essay "love, internet style," (needs underlined or italics) decribes how different online dating websides lean towards many different types of people.



Your grammer is overlly very good, it's just your wording. However word is something that doesn't happen by continuous correcting, only my practice and expirence. Reading the paper out loud helps too... though I admit it can be strange sitting in front of the computer reading it out loud... but it works pretty well.



Very informative. I had no idea those websites were that popular.
2008-10-19 18:45:53 UTC
I don't know if it's a mistake, but in the second sentence it says you eat poo...



Have you ever been interested in looking online for your soul mate? Well your not alone, more then 40 million Americans look at online dating I eat poo month. In the essay “Love, Internet Style” it describes how different online dating websites lean towards different types of people. First of all, “J Date” is a popular Jewish dating website. Second, Match.com boast that they are the leading website that provides you with more then 15 million singles. Lastly, “Latino People Meet” is a website that give Hispanic locals the chance to meet other Hispanics. Keep reading as this paper goes in depth on the different dating websites and which one may be perfect for you.



In present times, dating website is the new wave to meeting new classy people you might be interested in dating. “ J Date” is typically for the Jewish culture. Being Jewish is not necessary on “J date” , Although it is highly recommended. “J Date” states that “Every 23 minutes someone tells us they met their soul mate”. I personally agree to use a cultural based dating website for the fact that many people want to be dating in the same religion.



Many times people will not care about the religion and just wants to meet a sincere person willing to have a stable relationship. If this is the case, Match.com is the way to go. They have many ways to communicate such as, sending a wink, emailing, or sending a instant message. Match.com states they have the most singles on their website then any other dating website. They calculate to having 15 million members online looking for a healthy relationship. Dating websites can be frustrating due to the fact that maybe you might not get matched up with the right person. Match.com ensures your selections by letting you take a quick quiz to match you up correctly. I believe Match.com is the best and easiest way to meet other people online.
2008-10-19 18:44:11 UTC
if you want to make it better dont start off with a aquestion cause teachers hate that.
Anna R
2008-10-19 18:40:59 UTC
In the second sentence, "your" should be "you're" because it's a contraction. Other than that, it sounds/looks good!!

:)
noname
2008-10-19 18:45:49 UTC
There are many mistakes in this essay. Besides the fact that it seems to be a compilation of many commercial blurbs, with no editorial thought exerted by the writer, there are spelling and grammatical errors.

Your middle paragraph:

In present times, dating website is the new wave to meeting new classy people you might be interested in dating. “ J Date” is typically for the Jewish culture. Being Jewish is not necessary on “J date” , Although it is highly recommended. “J Date” states that “Every 23 minutes someone tells us they met their soul mate”. I personally agree to use a cultural based dating website for the fact that many people want to be dating in the same religion.

In present times, No! Today,

dating websites are.

New Wave is a cultural term taken from French cinema of the 1960s.

new classy people is the lowest common denominator of ad-speak

Start over and use your own thoughts!


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