Is this a good writing?

Question

I have a report due tomorrow that is about Canadian Animal Defense Systems. What do you think of my opening paragraph? Does it sound good? I'll post the rest of my essay later when I'm done. PLEASE no rude comments, just constructive criticism and nice comments, I'm only 12. Thanks!

Each wild creature in the huge array of animals that dwell in the rugged Canadian wilderness are all as different and strangely unique as the one mentioned before it. However, they all share one key feature that plays a crucial role in their survival: the all have an astonishing amount of stamina. This trait allows the animals to fend for themselves in the forests, and here it’s survival of the fittest. From the slow moving body of a turtle and its tough leather-like shell, to the fearsome and deadly bite of the wolf, Canada’s many species of wildlife all have a defense system that protects them from predators, both man and beast. Today, we will be exploring the astonishing defense systems of just a few of the thousands of fascinating organisms that are proud to call the North Canadian woodlands their home.

Answer 1

Seems good enough...But how does this sound for the first sentence?



Wild Life in its various forms evolve and survive in the plush Canadian wilderness. As commonly one hunts the other and sometimes the hunter then becomes the hunted, there is a strong strategy of defense mechanism each creature is bestowed with, to save itself from their predators and other foes.



I'm not saying its better than yours, its just a suggestion, if it may help

Answer 2

Okay, there are a couple of spelling mistakes, I will copy the writing, and fix the mistakes.

Each wild creature in the huge array of animals that dwell in the rugged Canadian wilderness are all as different and strangely unique as the one mentioned before it. However, they all share one key feature that plays a crucial role in their survival: they* all have an astonishing amount of stamina. This trait allows the animals to fend for themselves in the forests, and here it’s survival of the fittest. From the slow moving body of a turtle and its tough leather-like shell, to the fearsome and deadly bite of the wolf, Canada’s many species of wildlife all have a defense system that protects them from predators, both man and beast. Today, we will be exploring the astonishing defense systems of just a few of the thousands of fascinating organisms that are proud to call the North Canadian woodlands their home.

The only word you have to fix is the to they* overall I think it's good! :)

Answer 3

1) you would want to change the first sentence by cutting off 'as the one mentioned before it.'

2) in sentence 3, put a comma after 'and here'



the rest is very well written and im sure your teacher will be proud of you :)

Answer 4

It's pretty good, but it doesn't sound like the work of a 12-year old. It sounds like you have plagiarized it from somewhere.